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[Leo]

Julie P
Wow, it's wonderful!

[Ольга]

I agree with Leo It's true lyrical poetry

Maybe it's a bit inappropriate here, but I'd like to say that there must always be some place for hope. Being unhappy, a person will never make happy anyone else, even the one for whom he/she is sacrificing

[Julie P]

Thanks for such a high appraisal of this improvisation of mine
though I do not consider this passage to be anything of a true poetry,
as I was squeezed into the limits of quite "non-poetical" rhymes
I'm glad if you liked it

Here are my rhymes:
............breaking
............weak
............shaking
............trick

to Olga: this verse has nothing to do with my personality, being abstract and having no addressee. Though these words of yours were reasonable beyond any doubt

[Mickushka]

Well, I'll try...

Waves against the rocks is breaking,
And the light such weak.
Storm's rage our ship is shaking,
But I'll stand my trick.

[Leo]

You says that our love is breaking,
Says "It makes me so weak",
After that I cannot stand, I'm shaking,
Will it be the final trick?

[Julie P]

I like your ideas !

PS: Am I at liberty to correct any mistakes that I notice ? or the authors will consider me just a BORE ? )))))))
(and do the authors need it, by the way? )

[Leo]

Julie P
I think you can set some authors on the right way

[JaySky]

I just want you close, where we can stay forever...
I feel so romantic ah, spring...

[Julie P]

That glowing fire maddened me as dawn was breaking
And got me with entreaty of the weak
To soothe the pain and halt my shoulders' shaking
And free my soul from thoughts that do their trick

Rememb'ring you is like a razor blade
But indivertible is fate..

[Leo]

Julie P
Such an amazing poetry. It makes me think about something beautiful and bright...

[Ольга]

Julie P,

You've raised the bar of requirements to verses

True love should never be the cause of heart's on fire breaking,
Nor should it drain of strength to make the dreamer weak
While stuttering, head reeling and hands shaking
Are outward signs of inner yielding to passion's trick.

[Julie P]

That's the way I like it )) bravo, Olga

as far as I'm concerned, I'm passionately keen on composing verses in English and have a soft corner in my heart for - as you put it - this "raised" or old lofty style ))

... for those who favour fire to unwind
I proved to be just nothing of a kind... )))

[Ольга]

"I'm passionately keen on composing verses in English" - it means Leo hit the mark having offered to compose rhymes right here at the forum
I must admit we are alike in a sense because at the time of my studies at university I felt as passionate as you about memorizing new words Moreover, the longer a word was, the greater interest it presented to me. And for this reason I committed to memory quite a number of vocabulary items which can hardly be employed in colloquial speech - they are rather intended for essays, poetry and the like, in short, written speech
Do you plan to publish a collection of your verses one day?

[Julie P]

Olga, in my humble opinion I'm nowhere near publishing ))) though - inscrutable are the ways of the Lord.. and I'll probably do it one day in a small number of copies solely to distribute amidst my friends )))

I do share entirely your passion for uncommon (in terms of colloquialness) lexical items.
By the way, do YOU compose verses or the one above was an improvisation of yours ?

[Monica]

Нi!